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Writefag game 2? Anonymous 04/16/2025 (Wed) 12:09:35 No. 21141
This thread was pretty comfy until the hack. Here's how it works: 1 Post an image. 2 Type three tags not found in the image. 3 The anons below, who we'll call green anons, have to respond with short greens about the image that includes those tags. 4 The Green anons repeat the cycle by typing three tags at the end of their post. Tags: Food Ship Gambling
et parts of the floor >Pinkie stared at Rainbows terrified eyes, the gears grinding together in her head as she realises what is wrong... >Silly Dashie you can't eat from over there! >Pinkie hopped over to get her "friend", somehow having managed to splash water all over Dash, yet not getting a drop on the still steaming plate of broccoli >With a droop of her head, Pinkie grabbed the back of the rope on Dashes filly chair with her teeth, dragging it along the ground to what Dash believed would be her end >Shaking her head back and forth as well as despertely trying to move back from her would be demise, she quickly found that Pinkie had snuck on top of the back of her chair >With her right wet pink hoof, pinkie ripped the ponytape right off of Dashes muzzle, quickly covering Dashes loud yell with her left hoof >Pinkie looked over at the piece of tape she held, she noticed it was covered in blue hair, gritting her teeth and letting out a nearly silent "ouch" she threw the tape off to the side and refocused on her victim >Mrs. Pie then said, in a quiet sadistic tone directed souly to Rainbow Dash "Well Dashie! this is it!" quickly followed by mischievous giggling >Moving her left hoof slightly to the left of Dashes muzzle, and resting her right hoof directly onto the back of Dashes head she pressed ever so slightly against it, forcing Rainbows muzzle to get closer and closer to the steaming green mass >Tears fell from Dashes eyes as she began to accept her fate, her life ending here and now, destroyed by her own best friend >The green head of something her muzzle had never touched before violating her senses >Thinking to try and beg to Pinkie one last time she made the mistake of opening her mouth, and right as she did... >"EAT" Pinkie said with a yell, her right hoof pushing Dashes head down, and causing the violating green object to go straight into her mouth >Dash began choking instantly as it's unfimilar taste caused her to gag and make loud sputtering noises >Like a warrior downed in battle but unwilling to give up, Dash tried again and again to move away from the plate of horrors to no avail >Pinkie let out a quiet sigh and leaned towards Dash and bringing her hooves down to Dashes mouth, cupping the top with her right hoof and bottom with her left >"Oh COME ON Dashie, it's not THAT bad!" she said, as she forced Dashes mouth to move her green assailants head past her tear stained lips >Dash let out a hopeless squeal as she loudly swalloed her demise... >The quiet in the grungy wet basement was almost deafening, nothing but the sound of dripping water and Pinkies quick and scary yet ever slowing breathing could be heard. >"Huh you know Pinkie, that really wasn't that bad" >"Well duuuuh Dashie, what did you think, that I'd feed you poison or something" >Just then the door opened, and out from it came Mr. and Mrs. Cake carrying mops and planks of wood in purpose built Earth Pony saddle bags >Mrs. Cake spoke first "alright now little Fillies playtimes over, time to clean out the water in this basement and get to fixing the..." >Mr. and Mrs. Cake looked over to the two wide eyed fillies currently staring back at them, one on top of the other with the bottom one tied to a chair, her mane an absolute mess and her eyes wet as if she'd been sobbing for days, yet managing to look more bothered by being caught like this than by whatever had just transpired in the Cakes basement >Mr. Cake spoke up, "d-do I even wanna ask this time Pinkie Pie?" he said with a tired voice, as if he'd seen it all before >"OH OH!" Pinkie shouted "I was just teaching my best friend in the whole of Equestria here to eat her greens, and I think she enjoyed them too!" >Both Cakes looked over to Rainbow Dash, this time Mrs. Cake speaking "is that really aaall that happened here?" she said, drawing her words out and raising an eyebrow at Dash >Dash uttered out a weak "y-yes mam" towards the mare of the house hold >Mr. Cake let out a sigh of relief, followed up by Mrs. Cake speaking "well alrighty then you two, we'll give you a
few minutes to clean up, but then it's back to your chores for the day Mrs. Pie" >Pinkie groaned "yesss mam" *ugh* >And with that Mr. and Mrs. Cake trotted back upstairs closing the door behind them. >Rainbow Dash spoke in a raspy voice "can you untie me now, I can't really help you fo your chores like you asked if you keep me tied up like this" Tags: >Waterfall >Coconut >Octopus
>>21141 Maybe I should have read the op before typing all of that... Either way, I didn't get to see this Anons >>22265 Image
>>21141 >short greens heh ya.... I'd really appreciate it if people shit talked my Pinkie Pie and Dash greentext, as it's my first attempt at really writing a decently long story and I need the feedback, no matter how negative.
If my green is bad what do? I only made 1 or 2 green stories in my time at /mlp/
>>23454 Started reading it and thought "Oh, yet another dyke domination green." But, I decided to keep reading and was pleasantly surprised that it turned out to be a cute/innocent story of Pinkie uring Dash of her fear of eating vegetables. I think, if ypu want to make it more consistant overall, ypu shpuld avoid using the word "punishment", which is severe considering the plot. Maybe find some similar, but less severe word.
>>23857 Post it. Reading critiques is one of the best ways to improve.
>>23857 Yes, this (>>23913). Only way to get better is to receive criticism. Steps to get better: 1) Post your green 2) Receive criticism 3) Don't get butthurt 4) Use criticism to improve your next green. 5) Repeat. It's an iterative process.
>>23871 I'm glad you were pleasantly surprised by it, I'll try and tone it down if I end up doing sonething similar down the line. >>23857 I get that What>>23913is saying might be a bit scary, but you gotta do it

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